Outline
1. - Introduction
a) Thesis statement
1. - Introduction
a) Thesis statement
2. - About me
a) Name
a) Name
b) Occupation
c) Personality
d) Hobbies
e) Likes
f) Dislikes
3. - Positive things in my life
a) Family
a) Family
b) Friends
e) Major
4. - Goals
a) Short terms- goals (5 years)
a) Short terms- goals (5 years)
b) Long term- goals (10 years)
5. - Conclusion
FINAL DRAFT
About me…
My personality, my goals, all my life is wonderful and it is so different from other people; I am unique as you are; as anyone is. I am interesting and I expect so many things for my future, I hope that my life stills as good as now or even better.
My name is Cecilia Martínez Frausto, at this point of my life I am studying the third semester in the major of English Language Teaching and I am very happy with this. I have a very unique personality, I can be as sweet as a candy and bitter as a lemon, I am very honest, which can be bad sometimes because when you are too honest people on your side could be hurt by your words. I get angry easily with the slightest provocation, I am a dreamy and realistic girl at the same time, I am very complicated but if you know me you will know that it is not easy to get bored with me if you have me in your life. This is what I am and I will not change for anything neither for anyone. Talking about my hobbies, my favorite hobby is to talk with people that defend their point of view. It is motivating; I also love to spend time with my family and my boyfriend. I love them; I like to go to the movies and to go out with my friends every weekend. Another hobby that I have since I remember is drawing and honestly I am very good at that. I hate hypocrite and conformist people.
There are many positive things in my life, like my family, they are the best point in my life, they are my center, my support and the only people in whom I can really trust because they will never let me down. Nowadays, I have a few friends, but I know that some of them are the real ones, I like to go out with them; I know that when the whole thing is good or bad they are there next to me. And as I mentioned, my major is another thing that makes me happy, it is my passion, when I am in front of a group I feel a tremendous emotion, it is because I am very grateful, I have a lot of good things in my life that make it a good one with memories, dreams and goals.
Most of the time I think about my future goals in the short term that is in five years, I hope I will have finished my major and I want to continue studying a Master´s Degree. In five years, I might be married with my boyfriend, but I do not want to have children soon. My goals in the long term that is in ten years, I hope that I will have a good job as an English teacher, have my own house and car, and have a very cute child like me, luckily I will be happy and successful in all these life aspects.
All that I am is all that I have, because I can have plans or goals but the only thing that I have for sure is myself, I am always going to have all my expectations in mind to achieve them sooner or later but the memories that I have got through my life are the ones that I am going to cherish forever.

FIRST COMMENT DIANA SOFIA PACHECO VALLIN "PEER EDITING CHECK LIST"
ResponderEliminar1.- yes
2.- abut her life
3.- yes, but it is incomplete
4.- it does not cover all the points
5.- yes, it can be better
7.- no
8.- yes
9.- yes
10.- no
14.- yes
15.- no
SECOND COMMENT PAMELA MERCADO "PEER REVISION AND EDITING FORM"
CONTENT
1.- the writing is interesting
2.- yes
3.- yes
4.- no
5.- no
ORGANIZATION
1.- yes
2.- yes
STYLE
1.- yes
2.- no
3.- yes
4.- some of them